Lesson: Parallelism - Part II

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Hi,
You are making a reference of previous lesson in which the rule that pronoun ambiguity is removed when 2 clauser are in parallel structure.

Are we talking about 'Badgers' example video?
am confused.. can u provide the link?
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Yes, we're referring to the "badgers" example at https://www.gmatprepnow.com/module/gmat-sentence-correction/video/1162

I'm a bit curious here:
according to your video, parallelism can be achieved by repeat the opening word (eg: who). However, how can we know whether the author wants to start the parallel game from "who" or the following word?
Eg: The man who won the battle, took the cup, and then left the ring is my brother
- is this sentence still correct and pertain parallelism? should I repeat "who" 2 more times?
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In your sentence "The man who won the battle, took the cup, and then left the ring is my brother," there's no ambiguity regarding who completed those actions, so this sentence (as it stands) is fine. Remember, on the GMAT, your task isn't to identify the correct answer; it's to your task is to identify the best answer.

"For years, Manny searched for the anonymous man who donated millions of dollars to the orphanage that Manny founded and financed the construction of the local hospital" <- whit this sentence i am curious isn't "that Manny founded" also a relative clause? it starts with that and has a subject and a verb. Can we change this sentence using that also? like this

"For years, Manny searched for the anonymous man who donated millions of dollars to the orphanage that Manny founded and that financed the construction of the local hospital"

for me it seems like " that manny ~ " is modifying orphanage.
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That's a great idea, Celan. The problem is that we never use THAT to refer to a person.

"For years, Manny searched for the anonymous man who donated millions of dollars to the orphanage that Manny founded and THAT financed the construction of the local hospital"

In the above sentence, THAT refers to the person who financed the construction.

For the sentence "Gary's dog barks whenever it sees a cat enter the yard and it hears folk music" just curious as to whether there is a construction (putting meaning aside) where the relative clause could start with it and still be considered parallel...for example, would "Gary's dog will bark if it sees a cat or it hears folk music" be correct? I've removed the pronoun whenever so now both relative clauses start with "it". I found it tempting to be drawn to the pronoun "it" and skip over "whenever" so am just wanting to confirm my thinking around this concept (i.e. focus on the first pronoun that you see when assessing parallelism).
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Hi Karl,

The sentence "Gary's dog will bark if it sees a cat or it hears folk music" still has an ambiguity issue.

It suggests (possibly) that Gary's dog will perform two possible actions: bark or hear

To be more specific:
1) Gary's dog will bark if it sees a cat
OR
2) Gary's dog will hear folk music

To remove the ambiguity we can add a second IF for parallelism:
"Gary's dog will bark IF it sees a cat or IF it hears folk music"

Cheers,
Brent

Thanks for confirming Brent. I think might my confusion came from not distinguishing between a relative pronoun and other types of pronouns (in this case, "it" a personal pronoun).

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